after taking a lil'' break I came to the easy conclusion that there was many problems with the chapters. That''s why I decided to re-write the story again. probably the first REAL chapter will be tommorrow or the day after, This little trial I''ve did helped me a bit to understand what to or not. thanks to the little people that helped me and gave me some tips. I''ll delete this fiction when I put the next one ( will have the same title )