This is my first real time trying to write a story andthought that i had fleshed this story out but i realised that i hadn''t even scratched the surface of trying to flesh it out and to make it worse the i made the charcter extremely op so he could finish anything he truly wanted to in an instant.


    It is hard to write a story around a character that is that strong without a truly fleshed out story and i now have way way way more respect for the writers than can do it.


    I plan to make another story in the future and this time i will hopefully be ready and can actually write a more than 9 chapter story which i am sorry about to everyone that reads my story.The story has been taken without consent; if you see it on Amazon, report the incident.


    I will most likely try my hand at this story again after i have written the other story or maybe even a few other stories but i am burnt out on this one because of how shit i did with it.


    I will use a different style to write next time (I am thinking first person) and so i am hoping that everyone that reads my story will help me by telling me things i could have done better or telling me about how shit my grammar is and how to fix it.


    I would appreciate any comments about anything really because i need all the feedback i can get to improve.