I admit defeat.


    I hereby ask for forgiveness to every author of this small planet called Earth.


    I admit that, reading such beautiful works on this site made me overstimate my abilities and to think of being able to write the story I have always thought of writing.


    The past week Iperused the chapters I published and I came to a conclusion: it was hell. I gotgoosebumps while reading them, I now understand how I gained a 0.5 rating!


    Starting from the prologue, were I first wrote that his best friend suicided and then a few lines below i wrote that his body was found in adumpster. (I corrected it)Support creative writers by reading their stories on Royal Road, not stolen versions.


    In another chapter I mistaken I with HE because of the PoV change....


    Another problem is the PoV change itself, it do not flow with the story.


    In the end I solved the conundrum: I shall drop the story; it is too complexand long to actually write it down with isolated chapters, i have first to write it down! not only the important events like the MC died, the MC was enlighted here, etc... but a realdraft of the story with details too.


    Still I do not want to kill my story. I have the ideas, I have the mc, i have his past, his future and some of his Karma. So, more than dropped the correct term is indefinite hiatus, because i do not know when i will became enough proficient to write his history down. It is like trying to use the high-grade fire magic meteor with fire magic lev. 1


    So I plead you to write in the comments all of your critics, even if harsh, to help me grow and learn the right way to tell my story