So... I need help.


    english is not my native language (I thought I was pretty good at it, to the point of not making one mistake..... but, well, corrected the wrong things I could find)The narrative has been taken without permission. Report any sightings.


    Any correction is welcome, but if the composition of the phrase itself is wrong please explain why


    I would also like to know if the story is good.


    Is it?


    Is it as original as I thought?


    What can I do to improve?


    Any thought, any comment is helpful.


    Thank you.