Hello readers. Before i proceed any further, i want to know how coherent is my story telling? Does it have any semblance to an organized story? Do you think i am missing the fundamental background building?


    Though i did ask this question previously and  did get feedback(I am happy for the advice) it is still not enough.


    This book was originally published on Royal Road. Check it out there for the real experience.


    So Please! Tell me what you think.


    Even if you completely bash the story i am fine with it.


    Give me your feedback.


    It will be much appreciated.