I need some help. After not getting a lot of reads, I took a look at the basics- are the title and description interesting enough? I am worried the answer is NO. So, I am looking for some feedback on my title and description.
My current title is: Space Opera
A possible new title is: The Costa Brava Scenario, A Space Opera novel
Any thoughts on the title?
The original description (at the bottom of the post) is probably too long and not interesting enough. What do you think of the 2 possible new descriptions?
New Description Choice 1:
Angie’s heart started beating again. After the betrayal, she almost wished it wouldn’t. Angie had spent 6 years of her life getting ready for this moment, the moment the competition would start, the moment her team would prove they were the best. Now, instead of supervising the engineering team, she needed to lead a squad of in-game players. It would be hellish, but she would go through gaming hell to lead her team to victory in the Space Opera VR systems challenge.
New Description Option 2:
Game On!
Space Opera galaxy, a planet is ready and waiting for 21 squads of players. These squads are playing in a special competition with brand new developmental VR hardware. The engineers have it easy, they have to keep the VR systems running in real life. The players have it hard- they have to win the scenario to prove the amazing new VR hardware really is great.
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The game starts in t-minus 4 hours….
The Old Description (which you have probably seen):
How do you get fame, fortune, mountains of money, and validation of your life?
Space Opera VR Systems Challenge.
Space Opera VR Systems Challenge? Follow these 5 easy steps:
Team Bloop never considered the possibility of betrayal until it happened. Years of work and effort all hinged on the squad that Team President Angie could assemble. Then all they would have to do is win.
All of your thoughts and suggestions are welcome.
Many Thanks!